Question: Last edit i will show today?
A boy named Lysander was born in an inn 150 years ago with FANGS!
Most vampire’s teeth grow at the age of 10 but he was destined to be the protector/leader. If a baby vampire has its teeth right away it means he/she is destined to be a high ranking in the government of the country they are in.
As Lysander ran through the woods trying to escape the monstrous evil vampire Ritos, the leader of the evil vampire country Letar. Lysander the bodyguard of the good vampire country Ambary, leader Ramous. Had tripped and fallen. While his eyes slightly close he see’s a bright light towards him. Fighting off the evil vampire Ritos.
As lies on the ground with blood dripping from his eye he says under his breath “Ramous!” He see’s fist’s going back and forth from stomach to head to arm. As Ramous and Ritos back off from each other Ritos says to Ramous in a soft weary voice, “You have gotten stronger since the Last time we have fought.” Then Ramous replies with a slight bit of anger in his voice “Never underestimate your enemies of what there capable of even if you know them as well as you know yourself.”
While Lysander is on the ground watching Ramous and Ritos fight he finds the strength to stand up. He runs as fast as he can with as much strength as he has left. He gets far in the woods as he can still hear screams of pain. He reaches the stand of Ambary, which is a stick with to little branches. In one of those branches there is a small hole, which will make a portal appear if you insert the stone of redemption into the hole.
This portal will take you back to Ambary. As Lysander stands there he can see from 20 feet away Ramous lying there on the ground DEAD! Then he starts to run to Ramous but then he remembers what Ramous said to him the first day they met “Whatever happens to me don’t come back for me just move on.” That motivates Lysander to go through the portal. As he runs through the portal a tear starts to come down his cheek. He says softly “Ramous, I shall never give up just because you are dead.” When the portal closed Lysander ended up on Bergstien Street in Ambary.
Lysander walked to the government castle and came upon the council.
The councilmen asked Lysander where Ramous was. As he started to stutter a bright bloody tear came upon his soft pale cheek. He announced with a quiet voice dead.
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omg ..this might sound gay butt..u luv this story i actually dnt kno y lol thnx for givin me the begiin i rated your other posting i think but thanks for commenting on mine :)..x this is really good
it just seems like a stupid story just plain dumb sorry!
but if I have to help you I will say that you need to edit the first paragraph!!!
you should not TELL the reader you should show them
Rotfl!! FANGS! I couldn't read more than the first sentence, before I started laughing.
Edit up that first line, i think. That's my opinion. At least get rid of all caps